Reviewer: 2pmvietguh
Site: http://2pmvietguh.blogspot.com/
Requester:hitomi246123
Fanfic: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/18385/1/shinee-oneshots-apply-kpop-oneshot-shinee-you

Title: 4.5/5

As a reader, this would have likely gotten my attention.

Appearance: 0/10

There wasn't a poster for this oneshot. .and usually when there aren't any poster, I give it an automatic zero.

Forewords: 5/10

A oneshot usually doesn't have a foreword. So, I'm not sure whether I should give you points on this or not, so five points? I think it's fair enough?-

Plot: 17/20

Yunnie likes Jonghyun. She hates it whenever he's around any girls. Jonghyun likes Yunnie; yet he thinks that she doesn't like him, that they're just friends. Taemin also likes Yunnie. Jonghyun and Taemin both confessed to Yunnie, saying that they like her. She was surprised. She didn't like Taemin like that, yet she didn't want to hurt him. So, she has to choose between the two. At the end, she chose Jonghyun.

Your oneshot was short, sweet, and simple.. .I like it.

Originality: 17/20

(Reviewer's note: Originality is based on me, the reviewer. Just because you (as in readers) have read a fan fic or whatever that's similar to this, it doesn't mean that I have. So, this is my opinion, my views, so yeah. . Just had to get that out of the way.)

Cliche- Two guys both have a crush on main girl character.

Grammar/Spelling/Vocabulary/Punctuation: 10.5/15

The ones in parenthesis or are in bold are the ones that I have corrected.

A few examples:

"Geez louise don't yell I'm right here!" you said a little pevved (I'm guessing you meant peeved?) off.

You sighed quietly hoping no one would notice, but Taemin noticed making his suspision (suspicion) grow.

"Cuz your (you're) my player"

Flow: 4/5

For a oneshot, the pace of it was pretty good. It didn't take too long nor did it take too fast to progress, to get to the point.

Writing Style: 8.5/10

Your A/N's are hilarious! ^-^ Your writing style is pretty good

Other++ 5/5

Shinee <3

Lols at Onew's "All I wanted was peace and chicken".. .


Total: 71.5/100