Reviewer: 2pmvietguh
Site: http://2pmvietguh.blogspot.com/
Requester: amigodubu012
Fanfic: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/6492/i-m-yours-and-you-re-mine-romance-schoollife-shinee-taemin


Title: 3/5

The title is good, but it wouldn't have fully gotten my attention. There's a chance that I would have likely scrolled right pass it.

Appearance: 7/10

The poster's okay, pretty simple and sweet. Love the cute emoticons!

Foreword: 8/10

Your foreword was quite short, but the readers would've gotten the gist of what the story would have been about. Yet, the foreword seems to be a bit vague? Just a bit.- I like the fact that you even have each individual description for the characters.

Plot: 17.5/20

Since this story is still ongoing, I will summarize what I've read:

Shinee's Taemin has transferred to Cheon Woon High School. (private school) But, Min Jae doesn't seem to know or care about this Taemin.
Yoon A is Min Jae's best friend who knows a lot about Shinee.  Min Jae will be his tutor/mentor. It seems as if Taemin has fallen for Min Jae. And it seems as if Min Jae's falling for him. But she tries not to. She hates guys, because she has been hurt before.- With the whole incident of Shinee being caught by fan girls after school, Taemin and soon, Min Jae got into Shinee's limo.- Prom's in two weeks. Taemin asks Min Jae to Prom, she refuses. He uses Mrs. Park, the school's headmistress, to pretty much order Min Jae to go to prom with him. - There were three girls who warned Min Jae to stay away from Taemin.- Taemin and Min Jae goes to the mall. Shinee follows them.- Shinee will be performing at the school's prom.- As Shinee performed their song, "Lucifer", Taemin saw Min Jae amongst the crowd, she was standing there, listening to their song. When the song ended, the lights went off.- Min Jae gets 'kidnapped' by the three popular girls.- Donghae, Leeteuk, and Eunhyuk were going to beat her up. Taemin comes to the rescue. Taemin faints- It's cute how Taemin gets jealous whenever Min Jae mentions about Yoseob.-The guys took her to their dorm. - Taemin confesses to her, and kissed her.- She gets admitted to the hospital after she fainted, while she was visiting Yoseob- Shinee came to visit her. -Ever since the incident in the elevator. . .Min Jae is now interested in Shinee. - The two are now together.

Originality: 15/20

(Reviewer's note: Originality is based on me, the reviewer. Just because you (as in readers) have read a fan fic or whatever that's similar to this, it doesn't mean that I have. So, this is my opinion, my views, so yeah. . Just had to get that out of the way.

Cliches:

How main girl characters doesn't acknowledge Taemin's popularity, and that he is an idol. Yet, she falls for him.

Grammar/Spelling/Vocabulary/Punctuation: 10/15

Here's some of the mistakes that I have found, and changed. The ones in parenthesis or are in bold are the ones that I have corrected, taken out, or added.

There were some parts where you used past tense, when not necessary. For example:

Tae Min is falling in love with her day by day but she just don't (doesn't) notice it. Will she realized it and will Tae Min confessed?

Why everyone is excited? (Why is everyone excited?)

“Oh My God! I can’t believe it!” she was shaking me as if I am a doll

“That’s great! What did he said? (say)”

But we are still reach (rich) because the company is at my mom‘s side of family. (Um, I guess you meant "rich", not "reach"?)

They know that the fan girl is many. (They know that there are many fan girls)

But, she’s not an easy girl too (either).

He always here (hear) my story patiently and comfort me if I have any problems.

Flow: 4.5/5

The pace was pretty good. It didn't take too long to get to the point, nor did it take too quick.

Writing Style: 10/10

Other than the grammar mistakes, I like your writing style.- I liked the fact that you actually incorporate their idol life into your story.

Other++ 5/5

Shinee <3

I seriously love Onew! Onew's moments.

“Tae Min and Min Jae were….” I trailed off and their eyes were about to pop out.

“Eating my chicken??!!” suddenly, Onew hyung screamed. (I loved this part!)

I really like the cute moments that Taemin and Min Jae. For example, the part where the two were at the hospital, and Taemin wrote: "Min Jae-a, nan neomu neomu neomu neomu NEOMU saranghae~~! -Lee Tae Min-"


Total: 80/100