Reviewer: 2pmvietguh
Site: http://2pmvietguh.blogspot.com/
Requester: taemin4eva
Fanfic: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/21929/it-all-started-with-a-simple-visit-backstage-jiyong


Title: 7.5/10

    As a reader, this title would have likely gotten my attention. I would've been curious as to what would happen during the character's visit backstage.

Plot: 14/20

There's really not that much to summarize really, since the chapter's really short. So, so far:

    Peyton's best friends with Taeyang. She meets the other members during her visit backstage. She soon likes G-Dragon, vice versa. The two go on a date.

Short foreword: 8/10

    Your foreword was short, but it pretty much summed up as to what will be in your story.

Originality: 17/20

(Reviewer's note: Originality is based on me, the reviewer. Just because you (as in readers) have read a fan fic or whatever that's similar to this, it doesn't mean that I have. So, this is my opinion, my views, so yeah. . Just had to get that out of the way.)

Hmm . .I don't really see any cliches or whatever, well except for the girl's character.

Grammar/Spelling/Vocabulary/Punctuation: 12.5/15

The words that are in parenthesis or are bolded are the ones that have been fixed; the correct form.

Example:

..because they were all busy whenever her (she) and Taeyang hung out.

..Peyton dongseng, don't freak out, im (I'm) comin!"

"Well first i was thinking of walking down to that new italian restraunt (Italian Restaurant),

Flow: 2.5/5

    Even though it's a 3-shot, the story is going by a bit fast. It would have been nice if you've written something about the two texting each other, etc.

Writing Style: 11/15

    Since it was a pretty short chapter, it's a bit difficult for me to see how your writing style really is. I don't know if I'm making sense here, hopefully I am? But, so far, I like your writing style.

Other++ 5/5

Big Bang. G-dragon <3

Total: 77.5/100