Reviewer: 2pmvietguh
Site: http://2pmvietguh.blogspot.com/
Requester: jinijungminho
Fanfic: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/16548/why-can-t-we-be-together-minho-romance-shinee-taemin-you

Title: 4.5/5

As a reader this would've likely gotten my attention. I'm pretty sure that there's some kind of obstacle(s) for girl main character and the guy that she likes.

Appearance: 0/10

There weren't any posters, so there's no way for me judge/review it. I always just straight out give a zero (for all stories) if there aren't any posters.

I recommend you request either at Jnsterosity or Artsy Asian Crew for amazing graphic posters~

Forewords: 7.5/10

You've stated the main characters and the minor characters. You've also stated their relations with each other.- The foreword lets the readers know what to expect out of your story, and you have done a pretty good job with your foreword.

Plot: 16.5/20

Since this is still ongoing, I am going to summarize what I've read so far:

    Yoona enrolls into her sister's school, Seoul High University. Taemin is Yoona's sister's boyfriend. Jin Ae introduces Yoona to the guys. Yoona and Minho fell in love at first sight. Jonghyun also likes Yoona. Yoona is chosen to be Ms. Seoul High University. Minho is chosen to be Mr. Seoul High University. Later on in the story, Minho confesses to her, that he likes her.

Originality: 15/20

(Reviewer's Note: Originality is based on me, the reviewer. Just because you (as in readers) have read a fan fic or whatever that's similar to this, it doesn't mean that I have. So, this is my opinion, my views, so yeah. . Just had to get that out of the way.)

Cliches:

The mother always has to stop the girl from being with her son.

The guy is always from a rich family.

Love at first sight

Grammar/Spelling/Vocabulary/Punctuation: 10.5/15

Here's some of the mistakes that I have found, and changed. The ones in parenthesis or are in bold are the ones that I have corrected or added.

"But unnie! You're (Your (It's not your are grades. . )) grades would totally go down if you don't participate in it!"

So...that's Taemin...' I thought. But I was once again cut out when I felt someone bumped at (into) me...

 We have been finding them!" ("We have been looking for them" make more sense.)

"Welcome to Soeul (Seoul) High University Unnie!" Taeyon squealed as they stood infront of the school gates.

he spotted the sechedule (schedule) of the new transfer student and handed it to the latter.

"I have full trust in you unnie! I'm sure whatever that 'matter' is, you can do it! Infact, your (you're) pretty!" (you're= you are, so, "you're pretty")

Ms. Soeul (Seoul) High University audition Open!

Lack of apostrophes. "Ani... I'm not! I'm sorry once again!"

Flow: 4/5

So far, you have a pretty good pace. The story didn't take too long to progress, nor did it take too fast.

Writing Style: 7/10

You've had quite a bit of script form in your story. I was confused, because you could have just wrote the way you were writing in the beginning. Am I making any sense? Hope so. Other than that, I like your writing style.

Other++ 5/5

Shinee <3

Total: 70/100